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      Such a strange sentence. Makes you “garden path” (reanalyze the syntax after already being deeper into the structure). Minimally need a “that” after “Senator”.

      Though it’s uncommon usage, so that’s actually a tick against it potentially being AI generated.

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        need a “that” after “Senator”.

        You mean ‘who’, right? Senators are (usually bad) people so let’s not treat them like objects.

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          “That” or “who” are both commonly used for animate arguments. And given it is an object here, “whom” would be the most pretentious option.

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        “Senator Elon Musk” is ambiguous phrasing. Obviously, what is meant is “Senator [that] Elon Musk”, but it could also have been calling Aparthiedman himself a senator.

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          It reads like a gardenpath sentence.

          For example (made up on the spot so excuse me if its crap)

          Muscle man made harms others when using force

          [Muscle that was made by man]

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        Elon Musk isn’t a Senator. The title as written reads that way by default.

        A that shoved in the middle would fix that.

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        Senator Elon Musk Called a ‘Traitor’ Gets Rid of His Tesla: Don’t Want a Car Built By An ‘A**hole’

        This sounds like Elon is a Senator and was called a traitor; when it was actually Musk calling a Senator a traitor.

        Try:

        Senator, who was called a ‘Traitor’ by Elon Musk, Gets Rid of His Tesla: Don’t Want a Car Built By An ‘A**hole’